Derpy's Vortigaunt App

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Derpy's Vortigaunt App

Post  Derpy McFuckles on Tue Apr 03, 2012 10:42 am

Steam Name And ID: Derpy McFuckles (STEAM_0:1:14416184)

In-Game Main Character Name: John Garrison

How long have you played on the server?: A couple of weeks now

Character Backstory: (Minimum Two Paragraphs (Paragraph: Minimum Four Complete Sentences Per Paragraph): Maj'eyal Grol'ah was a normal Vortigaunt living in his homeworld. He specialized in repairing and healing for the sake of his family. When they invaded his homeworld, he was exiled to Xen and was Captured as a slave. Cascade happened at Black mesa, he did what every Vortigaunt would do, Escape.

On Earth,During the Black mesa incedint, Maj'eyal Grol'ah was caught in gunfire. He was badly wounded, but some rebels helped him to recover. While still being hurt the 7hour war began. Maj'eyal Grol'ah was captured and enslaved again. Maj'eyal Grol'ah was sent to City 18 to clean the streets. Today he still lives there, being shouted at and beaten by the Combine...



Examples of actions you would do In-Game: (minimum : 6):
/me Spots the officer and quickly cleans the floor
/me Washes the windows in fear
/me Puts trash in the trashcan
/me Cleans the nexus entrance
/me Begins to shake as the Officer walks by
/me Nods at the Citizen(s)
/me Nods at the Cp('s)
/me Rubs his shackles

Example of speech you would use in-game: (minimum 6):
"This one... Is in pain..."
"This one Agrees..."
"They are watching us..."
"Yes Master..."
"As this ones father once said... "Gah Man Yul"
"This one fears the combine"
"This one remembers Blackmesa..."

I would like to be a Vortigaunt because i think the CP's don't have much to do anymore... if there was more Vortigaunts they would have to watch them, then they wouldn't be so bored. I also want to become a Vortigaunt because they make the RP much more enjoyable.

Do you understand that if you abuse your rights your character will be banned, you will lose your whitelist, and you may be banned temporarily depending on your actions?:Yes,I Understand.
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Re: Derpy's Vortigaunt App

Post  mmoomaa on Sat Apr 07, 2012 5:45 pm

Seems very bland.... I know my opinion does not mean much to most people but it just seems like there was not enough effort put into the application, if I were gonna judge upon this I would probably say this would be a Neutral.
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Post  Derpy McFuckles on Sun Apr 08, 2012 3:32 pm

mmoomaa wrote:Seems very bland.... I know my opinion does not mean much to most people but it just seems like there was not enough effort put into the application, if I were gonna judge upon this I would probably say this would be a Neutral.
Thankyou for commenting Razz
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Re: Derpy's Vortigaunt App

Post  Harreh on Sun Apr 08, 2012 4:05 pm

My opinion on this application.. Pancakes.
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Re: Derpy's Vortigaunt App

Post  Ukraine on Mon Apr 09, 2012 6:55 pm

+Support Good app
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Re: Derpy's Vortigaunt App

Post  Fox McCloud on Mon Apr 09, 2012 8:01 pm

The back story is very generic and the role play needs to be more in depth, it just doesn't seem like you put any thought or time into the application...

-support for now, if you fix it later I'll re-review it.
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Re: Derpy's Vortigaunt App

Post  Derpy McFuckles on Tue Apr 10, 2012 4:57 am

Fox McCloud wrote:The back story is very generic and the role play needs to be more in depth, it just doesn't seem like you put any thought or time into the application...

-support for now, if you fix it later I'll re-review it.
Well thanks for giving me some information about what i should put in it i really need people like you to tell me this stuff... its just... I don't have much time on my hands... and i really have no idea how i can make the backstory any longer? or better?
also the actions... they are pretty much basic because i didn't wanna make any complicated ones...
But thanks for the feedback anyway Razz

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Re: Derpy's Vortigaunt App

Post  Burningfox6 on Tue Apr 10, 2012 4:52 pm

They were Born on Xen. DENIED.
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