Prisoner's MPF app

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Prisoner's MPF app

Post  Oliver Rusciano on Sat Feb 11, 2012 3:35 am

Steam Name And ID:prisoner357

In-Game Main Character Name:Oliver Rusciano

How long have you played on the server?:5-6 hours

Character Backstory (Minimum Two Paragraphs (Paragraph: Minimum Four Complete Sentences Per Paragraph):I had come here
from city 46. I had a hard life there when i was a kid this group of thugs beat me to an inch of death for 5 tokens
i found. I got the scar on my eye when i was 13 i walked over an antloins nest with my friend they slashed my face open
and mauled her to death. After that life was good i got to work in my fathers shop.

Then one morning when i was 16 my father croacked. Then i got into trouble for being in the slums i spent 7 weeks
in nexus. Then i had nothing left so i had to buy my own house. That was my first house it got repoed. so i worked till i was
18. Then i got enouhg money to move here in city 8 yesterday was my birthday

Examples of actions you would do In-Game (Minimum 10):"citizen"
"yes oficer"
"get on the wall"
"me pats citizen down finds drugs"
"citizen you were caught with level2 contriband"
"sir thats not mine"
"are you trying to resist citizen"
"citizen runs"
"me shoots man in leg"
"man screetches in pain"
"level 2 contriband meens amputation citizen"

Why do you want to be MPF?:So i can get back at thugs and rebels.

Do you understand that if you abuse your rights your character will be banned, you will lose your

whitelist, and you may be banned temporarily depending on your actions?:Yes

Do you understand that if you show traitorous actions and traits you will be amputated and PKed?:Yes

Do not go Rogue without my authorization! (Burningfox6). Also, If I'm not on, ask someone to ask me,

and just try to get your rank to 04 before you go Rogue.

Oliver Rusciano
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Join date : 2012-02-11

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Re: Prisoner's MPF app

Post  Moona on Sat Feb 11, 2012 8:16 am

You need a longer Backstory, It's only 2 Paragraphs and you need 4.

Use Caps and fix spelling a little bit on the Examples of Actions.

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Posts : 81
Join date : 2012-02-06
Location : Exactly where you want me to be

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Re: Prisoner's MPF app

Post  Burningfox6 on Sat Feb 11, 2012 10:41 am

DENIED. Revise this, like Mystic said: Use proper grammar and make the backstory make sense. I know you're new, and we can teach you, but you need to revise it.
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Location : Canada, eh?

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